Рецензия на «Bliss» (А Н Е Л)
Wow!! Even the constant rhyming repetition doesn't take away from integrity. You have a great gift. How you say you write poems - that they just come - proves it. The only place where I stumbled is "I resign to gloom". Doesn't seem justified to shorten it. Maybe "I resign to the gloom"? yours, Хотылёва 08.05.2004 • Заявить о нарушении
Dear Natasha,
I belive "GLOOM" is not noun that can be counted, so the "a" or "the" I belive will not be grammatically correct. A suggest the resign is a longer sound at the end gives required rythm But I will double check. Love ANEL А Н Е Л 10.05.2004 09:23 Заявить о нарушении
O! I know: "I resign to my gloom"!
I hope I don't come across as imposing, I just had a flash in my brain in response to your ... response :) And you're right, it does work with longer "resign". yours, Хотылёва 10.05.2004 10:24 Заявить о нарушении
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