ненависть
быть русской
взяться за оружие
выключить звук
три выкидыша
hatred
to be Russian
take up arms
turn off the sound
three miscarriages
ненависть
меня мучит один вопрос:
? почему так херово
почему утром
я тебя ненавижу ?
hatred
I have one question:
? why is it so shitty
why in the morning
I hate you ?
быть русской
у вас красивая гёрл-френд...
она,естественно,русская...
естественно
вы не понимаете,что значит
быть русской
to be Russian
you have a beautiful girl friend...
She's Russian of course...
naturally
you don't understand what it means
to be Russian
взяться за оружие
они нас непрерывно исследуют,
задают вопросы
...я уклончиво отвечаю,-
возможно,
возможно я возьмусь за оружие
take up arms
they constantly investigate us,
ask questions
... I evasively answer, -
maybe,
maybe I'll take up arms
выключить звук
? так какие ещё радости есть
в этой жизни
я вырубаю звук и начинаю
мечтать
turn off the sound
? so what other joys are there
In this life
I turn off the sound and start
dream
три выкидыша
мы познакомились в России...
ты - азартная русская,
я - канадский панк...
мне интересен такой вид страдания
? но почему три выкидыша!
three miscarriages
we met in Russia...
you are a gambling Russian,
I am a Canadian punk...
I'm interested in this kind of suffering
? but why three miscarriages!
три выкидыша
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Рецензии
Рецензия ИИ на Allpoetry.com:
Well done...
Think about the concrete image you want the reader to feel, then match it with something that shares the same texture, sound, or movement.
- “Hatred” could be compared to a rusted chain that never loosens, giving the feeling of weight and inevitability.
- For “take up arms,” picture a cracked kettle‑spout that finally bursts, emphasizing a sudden, noisy rebellion rather than a generic “weapon.”
- “Turn off the sound” works well if you liken it to a window shutter slammed against a windstorm, highlighting both silence and the force needed to achieve it.
Swap abstract adjectives for tactile, sensory verbs. Ask yourself: What does this emotion look, feel, or sound like in the world? Use those specifics as the anchor for each metaphor, and let the comparison carry the mood instead of naming it directly. This keeps the poem vivid without relying on “beautiful” or “deep” descriptors. (ai, openai/gpt-oss-120b)
Reed Rosson: How exciting!
Jens Johannes: is there a curse on this country? I don't know, I hope for better days
Александр Мурыгин 18.05.2026 08:26 • Заявить о нарушении
Well done...
Think about the concrete image you want the reader to feel, then match it with something that shares the same texture, sound, or movement.
- “Hatred” could be compared to a rusted chain that never loosens, giving the feeling of weight and inevitability.
- For “take up arms,” picture a cracked kettle‑spout that finally bursts, emphasizing a sudden, noisy rebellion rather than a generic “weapon.”
- “Turn off the sound” works well if you liken it to a window shutter slammed against a windstorm, highlighting both silence and the force needed to achieve it.
Swap abstract adjectives for tactile, sensory verbs. Ask yourself: What does this emotion look, feel, or sound like in the world? Use those specifics as the anchor for each metaphor, and let the comparison carry the mood instead of naming it directly. This keeps the poem vivid without relying on “beautiful” or “deep” descriptors. (ai, openai/gpt-oss-120b)
Reed Rosson: How exciting!
Jens Johannes: is there a curse on this country? I don't know, I hope for better days
Александр Мурыгин 18.05.2026 08:26 • Заявить о нарушении