Evolution creatures

How many biting critters
Not only in the world of animals!
God created all kinds pair of
And, they also added people!

From the stone in the cliffs apartments
Before the first growl of words
From pits, turned into toilets
To the country's first cities...

But someone else today-
Plays biting blood!
Can it be true, that God's mistake?
After he left, we - love!

But the creature as he was, will be,
With the presence of evil hearts.
To bite they will not forget,
Until the End


Перевод текста:
http://www.stihi.ru/2017/04/08/11664


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Quite impressive. Thanks a lot!!!

Рамиро Лебедев-Толмач   11.04.2017 18:35     Заявить о нарушении
My English is poor. And me it is surprising that you have noted. Just I used a perevolchik. In English likely verses awfully sound.

Сергей Стихийный   11.04.2017 19:04   Заявить о нарушении
Переводчик:-)

Сергей Стихийный   11.04.2017 19:06   Заявить о нарушении
I wrote "impressive" which doesn't mean that your English was absolutely correct. Many "poets" who know English no better than you write lots of poems in that foreign language and think they are something special.
You are another case - you are honest. As for your knowledge of English, it can improve with the time (unless you are 95 years old, of course ). So, best widshes and good luck!

Рамиро Лебедев-Толмач   12.04.2017 13:13   Заявить о нарушении
will explain to you why I published in English.
I like texts from Depeche Mode. I noticed that the double translation (Russian-English, English-in Russian) in the program "online translator gives the effect of replacing the words and meaning of porrj! This gives new perspective look at his stiho!
Thank you for the interesting communication! I hope you understand that text

Сергей Стихийный   12.04.2017 20:36   Заявить о нарушении
Thank You! Now your English is much better. Good luck!

Рамиро Лебедев-Толмач   13.04.2017 13:12   Заявить о нарушении
Надеюсь все норм написал))))

Маяк Митюнин Андрей   18.10.2017 19:21   Заявить о нарушении
На это произведение написаны 3 рецензии, здесь отображается последняя, остальные - в полном списке.