Б. Окуджава-Господа юнкера. English translation

Bulat Okudzhava - My Fellow Cadets

Our life's not a game! Time to marshal parade,
Fringe is crimson, war horses are chestnut.
Oh my fellow cadets, what were your last night bets?
By today you are officer recruits.

Oh my fellow cadets, what were your last night bets
Without your dashing officer’s posture.
You remember way back, lest you dread to regret
The Fontanka strolls’ enticing moisture.

Granite of riverbanks harbors thunderous ranks,
But the parting is not worth the waiting.
At the German war front only guns make the cut,
And your bride will find solace in dating.

Oh my fellow cadets, point your bayonets!
Trenches froze with no one to mingle…
Oh my fellow cadets, what were your last night bets?
But today you are equally single.


Булат Окуджавa - Господа юнкера

Наша жизнь - не игра! Собираться пора,
Кант малинов, и лошади серы.
Господа юнкера, кем вы были вчера?
А сегодня вы все офицеры.


Господа юнкера, кем вы были вчера,
Без лихой офицерской осанки.
Можно вспомнить опять, ах, зачем вспоминать,
Как ходили гулять по фонтанке.

Над гранитной Невой гром стоит полковой
Да прощанье недорого стоит.
На германской  войне только пушки в цене,
А невесту другой успокоит.

Господа юнкера - в штыковую, ура!
Замерзают окопы пустые.
Господа юнкера, кем вы были вчера,
Да и нынче вы все холостые.


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It's awesome. "But the parting is hardly worth waiting" is the only line that troubles me. I think you're trying to say "the parting is cheap, it's not worth waiting to see her again." Maybe something like "But the parting is not worth the waiting" ?? Other than that, I can't imagine a better job!

Евгения Саркисьянц   05.05.2012 17:49     Заявить о нарушении
Евгения,
You are too kind. Thank you for a very helpful insight. There are more lines that bother me... I set it sit and simmer for a while.
Best,
Dina

Беляева Дина   05.05.2012 21:11   Заявить о нарушении
Jenny,
You were spot on right! Could not say it more idiomatic...
THANK YOU!

Беляева Дина   19.01.2013 00:22   Заявить о нарушении