I shall not side with those who flee
This land, torn by the villain's claws.
Their blatant praise is lost on me,
My song is not for their applause.
The outcast always pains me though,
Much like the ill or the disgraced.
The roamer in the dark, you know
How bitter foreign bread can taste.
And we, amid the flames and smoke,
Deplete what little youth we nest,
Howbeit, not a single stroke
We have diverted from our breast.
True, if the reckoning should come,
We will defend each of these hours…
And yet no people are more numb,
Or arrogant, or plain, than ours.
* * *
Не с теми я, кто бросил землю
На растерзание врагам.
Их грубой лести я не внемлю,
Им песен я своих не дам.
Но вечно жалок мне изгнанник,
Как заключенный, как больной.
Темна твоя дорога, странник,
Полынью пахнет хлеб чужой.
А здесь, в глухом чаду пожара
Остаток юности губя,
Мы ни единого удара
Не отклонили от себя.
И знаем, что в оценке поздней
Оправдан будет каждый час...
Но в мире нет людей бесслезней,
Надменнее и проще нас.
Июль 1922, Петербург
Анна Ахматова Не с теми я, кто бросил землю Englis
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For someone who by her own confession values being true to the original "in feeling and melody" and is ready to "sacrifice literal meaning and rhyme perfection", you've achieved the former admirably, without having to resort to the latter. Had I managed to find your translation, I would have never made my own misguided attempt to translate poetry from one foreign language to another. Here is to Google, inciting poetic diversity through the imperfection of its search algorithms since 1999! :-)
I was particularly moved by your rendition of the second stanza, the one I struggled with the most. Still, all the awe and admiration I feel for your work notwithstanding, I'd like to suggest that using "who" instead of "that" in verses 2 and 4 would sound more personable, and while equally grammatically correct, would make the grammarnazi happier.
For what it is worth, you've gained a fan today!
Велиандр 04.09.2013 07:20 • Заявить о нарушении
I was particularly moved by your rendition of the second stanza, the one I struggled with the most. Still, all the awe and admiration I feel for your work notwithstanding, I'd like to suggest that using "who" instead of "that" in verses 2 and 4 would sound more personable, and while equally grammatically correct, would make the grammarnazi happier.
For what it is worth, you've gained a fan today!
Велиандр 04.09.2013 07:20 • Заявить о нарушении
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