Why do I devote
All the lines to you?
Oh, dear, and I wrote
Many books anew…
Why do these books matter
If you don’t like me enough?
Yeah, I’m kind, they chatter,
But I’m a fool with my love…
06.10.08
(Book 13 "Thou", cycle 62 "The Turn Away To Be Awful")
Why Do I Devote?
© Copyright: Максим Митрофанов 2, 2010
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Not 100% sure about "Yeah" - why not "yes" or "sure" or "true". The poem begins on quite a high note and all of a sudden this "yeah" stands out like a foreign object :-)
Very nice poetry though, I enjoyed it!
Евгения Саркисьянц 03.03.2011 01:52 • Заявить о нарушении
Very nice poetry though, I enjoyed it!
Евгения Саркисьянц 03.03.2011 01:52 • Заявить о нарушении
Thank you. From the very beginning the poem was planned to be not so "serious". The word "chatter" "stands out like a foreign object" too. It's not the matter. The matter is in the style which is specially turned, up to the not official till the end... So, there's no high note in the composition.
Максим Митрофанов 2 05.03.2011 01:00 Заявить о нарушении
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