Your sole is closed forewer

Your smile like the sun at a daylight,
Your eyes like the crystal of stream!
Your only the cause of my madness
Of suddenly blowing dream!
But all my emotions had failure
Have spread in your frozen see
Your sole is closed forewer,
Is closed forewer for me...

I saw always, sleeping your features,
I heard as in mirage your call,
I drew you in virtual pictures,
That never will came from the wall !!
I do every moment remember,
The memory ‘s only I use!
Your sole is closed forewer,
For me only fate is - to lose...

Ov’ you is my summer so claudy!
Ov’ you is my autumn so cold!
I want you to give me your body
I want you to come in my world!
Such beauty I haven’t see ever,
So crazy I never had been,
Your sole is closed forewer
Is closed forewer for me!

The end of the lyrical stories
Is fatal and always the same,
My time to be livelong - no worries,
While whispering over your name!
I see in the eyes of a devil! -
Afraid of the answer, he'll give
Your sole is closed forewer!?
From now, what sense is to live?

31 октября 2000


Рецензии
Dmitriy,
so great lyrics and gorgeous!
I have got a huge pleasure while reading it!

Just in line: "I want you to give me youR body" did you mean ? ))
Best regards! Netta.

P.S. my poetry in english most is translation from Russian creations. Of course not such rhythmically. When translating is more complication to find a right phrase that it doesn't change the meaning, sense, point, spirit... ))

Нета Эйси   21.02.2016 17:57     Заявить о нарушении
Much thanks.

Yes, certainly youR body. Just now will correct :)

Дмитрий Вл Клименко   21.02.2016 18:04   Заявить о нарушении
Если не сложно, почитайте мои в английском варианте. Интересно Ваше мнение.
Я в грамматике вообще не сильна )))
Даже некий спор с рецензистом вышел : ...to my loving heart или by my loving heart.
Понимаю , что англичане больше говорят "by my.." , но смысл при переводе теряется. Вообще как-то костно звучит .
С уважением

Нета Эйси   21.02.2016 19:44   Заявить о нарушении
Я вообще предупрежу - я не Маге-Мастер и не отличник тоже. Хоть и жизнь немного связана с иностранными языками, но всё не доведу до совершенства...
Написал вот за всё время 5 или 6 стихов на английском, как мог.
Но ОК, я почитаю Ваши, если что-то своим не шибко экспертным глазом замечу, напишу.

Дмитрий Вл Клименко   22.02.2016 00:36   Заявить о нарушении