Much talking 'bout Unity, Highers, Light,
Make me lose temper and innerly hide,
That's not my philosophy, not my world,
I'm longing for gothic carnal fleshy girl.
If you want to be my bride,
Share my Credo, darken light,
And kiss me like vampire.
If you want to be my mate,
Put on leather, rest in shade,
Give me night of desire.
If you want to be my star,
Play with razor, rip a scar,
Turn Queen of my empire.
Infinite wisdoms become rubbish and dust,
In my universe, it's mystics & aristocratic gust,
I'm fond of flaming passion when bodies melt,
Exceeding hundred speed, I don't fasten belt.
Share my Credo
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You've definitely got your own dark universe here) Gothic vibes, vampire kisses, leather, passion and a touch of aristocratic madness — quite a cocktail) The lyrics have a strong rebellious attitude and a catchy chorus that gives the poem a song-like feel. Some phrases sound a little unusual in English and could use polishing, but the atmosphere is clear: no boring sermons, no spiritual enlightenment — just darkness, desire and drama. Keep that gothic fire burning)
A few hints to polish some lines:
Makes me lose my temper and retreat inside
Share my creed and shun the light
And kiss me like a vampire
Wear leather, dwell in the shade
Give me a night of desire
Play with a razor, leave a scar
Be the queen of my empire.
Infinite wisdom turns to ash and dust
My universe is mystique and aristocratic lust
I'm fond of fiery passion when bodies melt
Going over a hundred, I never buckle the belt.
Тьяната Сакаулкья 31.10.2026 16:32 • Заявить о нарушении
A few hints to polish some lines:
Makes me lose my temper and retreat inside
Share my creed and shun the light
And kiss me like a vampire
Wear leather, dwell in the shade
Give me a night of desire
Play with a razor, leave a scar
Be the queen of my empire.
Infinite wisdom turns to ash and dust
My universe is mystique and aristocratic lust
I'm fond of fiery passion when bodies melt
Going over a hundred, I never buckle the belt.
Тьяната Сакаулкья 31.10.2026 16:32 • Заявить о нарушении
Fair enough)I respect artistic freedom & welcome originality)
Тьяната Сакаулкья 31.10.2026 20:13 Заявить о нарушении
Тьяната Сакаулкья 31.10.2026 20:13 Заявить о нарушении
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