Now - here? No where!
Nowheremore!!!
Sticky fears disappear
From my Soul core.
Having zeroed accounts
Of humdrum weekdays,
I dissolve myself in clouds
Of electric ways.
Don't find my traces, Dear,
With HeisEnberg Low -
But for you I disappear
In the Area that's near
Nowheremore!!!
Nowheremore
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pisare, I guess it's feasible to change "don't" to "won't"
And... razmer sbishe^-)))
IMHO, should be smth like this:
Now - here? No where!
Nowheremore!!!
Sticky fears disappear
From my core.
Having zeroed accounts
Of weekdays,
I dissolve myself in clouds
Of my ways.
Won't you find my traces, Dear,
High or Low -
But for you I disappear
In the Area that's near
Nowheremore!!!
Geizenberga zhal' no on v razmer ne lozhitzzo:-))
I... da, zhenschin obychno nazyvayut "darling" ^-)))))
Илья Бестужев 12.06.2014 17:24 • Заявить о нарушении
And... razmer sbishe^-)))
IMHO, should be smth like this:
Now - here? No where!
Nowheremore!!!
Sticky fears disappear
From my core.
Having zeroed accounts
Of weekdays,
I dissolve myself in clouds
Of my ways.
Won't you find my traces, Dear,
High or Low -
But for you I disappear
In the Area that's near
Nowheremore!!!
Geizenberga zhal' no on v razmer ne lozhitzzo:-))
I... da, zhenschin obychno nazyvayut "darling" ^-)))))
Илья Бестужев 12.06.2014 17:24 • Заявить о нарушении
Thanks you, Ilya I will take into account your remarks and I try to remake stiho soon. Zhal rastvatsa s HeizEnbergom khotya udarenie sohranyaet razmer
Эйльем Лард 12.06.2014 22:46 Заявить о нарушении
Эйльем Лард 12.06.2014 22:46 Заявить о нарушении