You ve got a feeling

You've got a feeling
When you’re in love...
You've got a feeling
When you was thrown...

You've got a feeling
When you cry...
Will you feel anything
When you die?

You've got a feeling
When you're in shame...
You've got a feeling
When you're in blame...

You've got a feeling
Even in the vapor time...
What will you feel
When death stands by?

You've got a feeling
When you're full with drive.
You've got a feeling
That means you're alive!

You've got a feeling
When you jump into the sky
What will you feel
What if you die?

You've got a feeling
When you take a crown.
You've got a feeling
If you’re falling down.

You've got a feeling
When you are alive
You won't feel anything
When you died...


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Извиняюсь за то что поспешно выложил стих с грамматическими ошибками...
Сейчас всё уже исправлено

Валентин Ямб   06.04.2012 16:16     Заявить о нарушении
You've got a feeling
When you’re in love...
You've got a feeling
When you was thrown...

You've got a feeling
When you cry...
Will you feel anything
When you die?

You've got a feeling
When you're in shame...
You've got a feeling
When you're in blame...

You've got a feeling
Even in the vapor time...
What will you feel
When death stands by?

You've got a feeling
When you're full with drive.
You've got a feeling
That means you're alive!

You've got a feeling
When you jump into the sky
What will you feel
What if you die?

You've got a feeling
When you take a crown.
You've got a feeling
If you’re falling down.

You've got a feeling
When you are alive
You won't feel anything
When you 'are died' нельзя так сказать к сожалению :).Are dead или died, но тогда еще слог додумывать. have тоже не подойдет,я уже думала.

в двух местах все-таки 're пропустила я, и порядок слов после What поправила. прошу прощения за такое вторжение, но теперь точно без ошибок. только с последней строчкой придумать чет надо. хотя на русские уши может и нормально будет...)
с уважением,

Любовь Счастливая   08.04.2012 01:57   Заявить о нарушении