;Once upon a time,
Lived a little girl.
She like a darkness night.
She like to be alone.
She brought through the darkness night
Her own miss, her own tears.
She love a darkness night.
She hate a brightness sun.
She met a little boy,
Who like a brightness sun.
He like to be a fun.
He has never been alone.
He brought through the brightnes sun
His own happy, his own smiles
He love a brightness sun.
He hate a darkness night.
They falled in love for the first time.
They falled in love so strong.
They were a crazy couple.
They were so mavellous.
But she afraded to miss him,
And went so far away.
He looked for her a long time.
He spent a many years.
And now she is brightness moon.
And now he is darkness sun.
Love story
© Copyright: Катерина Николаевна, 2011
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Очень красиво, только в этих строках:
"She like a darkness night.
She like to be alone."
"She love a darkness night.
She hate a brightness sun."
"He like to be a fun."
"He love a brightness sun.
He hate a darkness night."
После "like", "love" и "hate" на конце буква "s" будет и слова "darkness" и "brightness" должны быть без словообразовательного суффикса "ness".
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"She like a darkness night.
She like to be alone."
"She love a darkness night.
She hate a brightness sun."
"He like to be a fun."
"He love a brightness sun.
He hate a darkness night."
После "like", "love" и "hate" на конце буква "s" будет и слова "darkness" и "brightness" должны быть без словообразовательного суффикса "ness".
Извините, пожалуйста за замечания! У меня кстати есть стихи похожие на Ваши и тоже на английском, если интересно http://www.stihi.ru/2016/08/08/7256, http://www.stihi.ru/2016/10/29/7515
Аннет Герцен 02.01.2017 17:11 • Заявить о нарушении