Wake up the Sun
run - be the first
When you are going to the river
Dance on the sky
I Dont know why
Maybe the sky is the liquid silver
When you are free
You are happy and fly ...
I see on your face wonderful smile
try to believe
in all your dreams
and all will be fine I know – so while:
Wake up the Sun
run - be the first
Whenyou are going to the river
Dance on the sky
I Dont know why
Maybe the sky is the liquid silver
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1) "in your all the dreams" change to "in all your dreams"
2) "When are you going..." should by replaced by "When you're going..."
3) "...the silver", maybe, it would be better to write simply "silver", or change to some silver thing, e.g. a silver plate
4) "You happy" change to "You're happy"
5) In "I see on your face wonderful smile" check the order of the words
Have a nice day!
Smile and be happy=)
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