I need some more of light

So all the stars are gone
And only moon is left,
I wonder if the world would mind
If it will be kidnapped.

I need some more of light!
I’ll take the moon from sky
And in the deepest, darkest night
Will catch some fireflies.

I’ll scoop them in a jar
And hoist it all around
The light will shine so far and far
With jingly silent sound.


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Interesting imagery.

Беляева Дина   31.05.2010 01:14     Заявить о нарушении
Thank you.
Was written in merry spirit of Christmas coming.

Дар Ив   31.05.2010 01:18   Заявить о нарушении
The first instance of "the moon" is missing the definite article.

Беляева Дина   31.05.2010 01:28   Заявить о нарушении
Thank you for pointing it out, although i won't do anything for that matter.

Дар Ив   31.05.2010 01:38   Заявить о нарушении
На это произведение написаны 2 рецензии, здесь отображается последняя, остальные - в полном списке.