Nave from Beyond
I looked at it and thought
It was more than I expected.
Once I thought that it could
Take me anywhere, but I was wrong.
It could bring me only in chaos.
I understood that I was a part of chaos
And chaos was a part of me.
Meanwhile
I heard wheels and looked out of the window:
Olive trees along the road were glittering in the sun,
Animals came out towards me nodding their heads,
Sea was roaring somewhere else.
And while I was sleeping
The train was rounding the planet,
A dark forest and snow...
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Странно звучит фраза "The train was rounding the planet"...слово rounding вряд ли уместно...похоже на то, что поезд скруглял планету...лучше, пожалуй, ИМХО ... was moving around the planet - кружил, шел вокруг..С ув.О.С.
Оксана Соловьева 09.02.2010 15:47 Заявить о нарушении
А nave - корабль =_)
Джон Вэйн 09.02.2010 18:56 Заявить о нарушении
Оксана Соловьева 09.02.2010 19:45 Заявить о нарушении
Джон Вэйн 10.02.2010 00:48 Заявить о нарушении