One time we were born

One time we were born,
One time we are dyeing,
And we don’t return,
And you will be crying.
But also one time
We meet you on sky –
The life after death
Is really fine.
14.11.05г.


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It is a really beautiful poem!
But I think *dying* (the 2-nd line) is more correct than *dieing*.
And the 7-th line, they say *after death*, not *after die*.
If there were music, it would be able to become a wonderful song!

Елена Заостровцева   19.02.2010 12:54     Заявить о нарушении
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