Autumn, I lost myself in you...
Autumn - my abyss that's never blue,
But you are so precious for me today,
My beautiful autumn, when it's time to pray…
I lost myself in your yellow laces,
In a keening charm of your secret faces,
How you were precious for me last day,
When I was despairing in my own way!
I lost myself in your lonely alleys
And deeply fall to the immense valleys,
How you’ll be precious for me the next day,
When I will be proud of yesterday!
Autumn, I lost myself in you,
Autumn - my abyss that may be blue,
For good you’ll be precious for me as today,
Even if I’ll find my genuine way!
28.06.2008.
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Good luck- and better command of grammar...
^))
Леди Гор 12.07.2008 00:12 Заявить о нарушении
Good luck,
Романова Екатерина 12.07.2008 01:04 Заявить о нарушении
Леди Гор 12.07.2008 21:40 Заявить о нарушении
And as a matter of fact - here, in your review, my eye didn’t find any concrete description of my mistakes that you’re talking about… Believe that screaming about nothing is not a good way to establish somebody’s labour and all the more to exalt yourself.
I wish you patience and creative sincerity.))
Katrin R.
Романова Екатерина 13.07.2008 02:20 Заявить о нарушении
It's absolutely impossible to say so. "How precious you were..."is the only possible way.
In a keening charm of your secret faces,
Keening- is it your own invention? Are you fond of Lewis Carroll?
When I was despairing in my own way!
The verb "to despair" belongs to non-progressive type- like many others denoting not action but state and feeling (like, hate, envy...)
I think that's enough to show I'm not pretending just to offend you on my bare word...
I lost myself in your lonely alleys
And deeply fall to the immense valleys,
How you’ll be precious for me the next day,
When I will be proud of yesterday!
Autumn, I lost myself in you,
Autumn - my abyss that may be blue,
For good you’ll be precious for me as today,
Even if I’ll find my genuine way!
Леди Гор 13.07.2008 19:29 Заявить о нарушении