Bags and a beggar

What's bugging you here? Big bags and a beggar..?
Begin then some begging for bigger own soul.
The time’s leaping faster while you are still dragging,
performing hammed stabbing through each second's wall.

From second-to-second – some spares, some conclusions.
From second to no one – leftovers of flesh.
Imaging – the bag is your final seclusion,
much lighter than wing is your value in cash.

March 19, 2007

Iouri Lazirko
Copyright ©2007 Iouri Lazirko


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Well, well, well... That play on words and sounds) I wonder whether all the amateur non-native-English-speaking poets start the same way? And else: shall I ever reach the same level of poetic speech and wield such a formidable pen as You do now? That is the question... :)

Агната   05.02.2009 11:33     Заявить о нарушении
I’m glad you found some time to read it.
Somehow writing in English is like stepping to a different world of my imagination.And it is a lot there to discover. I am just a student of myself.
Are you an interpreter or immigrant or both?
Your written thoughts more English-like that mine.

Юрий Лазирко   05.02.2009 20:18   Заявить о нарушении
I was trying to add a comment on the "For Good" verse, too, but because I had deleted my initial entry there, I was not allowed to.
It was just a quote of Oscar Wilde's it reminded me of:
"It is always with the best intentions that the worst work is done."

I think, imagination is the crucial issue of good poetry.
Am I right supposing that You are thinking English, too?

I am none of the two suggestions of Yours) I was trained to be a teacher of English and German, though at my current work English is not a subject but an application.

Агната   05.02.2009 20:58   Заявить о нарушении
Sure, the smallest part of my brain is occupied with English, but mostly with a technical flavor of it.
So my thinking process is not yet “there” but wishful and slowly approachable.
Thank you for the “For Good” ‘s comment. Unfortunately, my German could be visualized as a cipher :)
Well, your English is great!

Юрий Лазирко   05.02.2009 21:25   Заявить о нарушении