Falling into Silence

I draw the shawl more closely
round my shoulders;
shelter in my skin's membrane
as earth's pores drink the rain.

Unique, each minute crystal note
calibrates an inner scale:
rain on metal, rain on shale,
arpeggios of shell, frond, petal…

Droplets fall discretely,
but precipitate as chains;
in the pond's clear glaze the beads
implode, concentric rings in jade.

A lotus chalice fills, to form
a scented, stamen-filtered pool;
in that pool, a tiny pulse
of consciousness, a precious jewel.

Within translucency of skin
pellucid miracles transform:
the lotus opens to reveal
its jewel; a child is born…
 
The lotus floats above its pad
in waters far beyond its depth;
the unborn child, a lotus bud
floating on its hidden stem

hears heart as murmur overhead,
as, eyes closed, I might hear
rain's fugue - the separate note,
the threnody: the moment in eternity…

A gust of wind scoops random drops
in handfuls, scatters them again
to rattle against walls and roof like grain -
before sky's loosened tongues subside,
return to silence, whence they came…

I wrap the shawl about myself, eyes closed,
and sense the earth exhale…


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I like it but the same time not really... your adjectives are shown in nouns and that's wonderful: "translucency of skin", "crystal note calibrates an inner scale", "a tiny pulse of consciousness". i like that. but.... i didn't like the thing that when i was reading ur poem, i had a feeling like a read a science book, either physics or biology, smth like that
but it's pretty nice one

girl-dandelion

Девочка-Одуванчик   08.05.2004 23:24     Заявить о нарушении
Dear girl-dandelion, how interesting that you should have this reaction, because it's very similar to my own. Ambivalence. The effect you describe is due to the fact that the images came during a meditation retreat, when one of the tasks was simply to observe the activity of one's mind (i.e. with detachment) and try to go beyond this, into stillness and silence. Both the experience and the poem were experiments for me, and I have mixed feelings about the results. You picked that up immediately, and I am glad of this feedback. Thank you! ((:-_-:))

Jena Woodhouse   09.05.2004 06:20   Заявить о нарушении
you know! that is so cool that u believe in meditation and that kind of stuff! I'm sure that it helps your creativity! keepe writing in foreign language!

Девочка-Одуванчик   14.05.2004 05:20   Заявить о нарушении