Sun in the Sky,
Sweat in my eyes,
Sand on my feet,
Sand in the blood.
I left my home
A long-long time ago.
I keep my way
But now I"m alone.
The caravan"s dead,
But I"m still alive.
No trace around,
no any signs.
Only desert
And sun in the sky.
Sun, I surrender, don"t hurt me.
Don"t you see — I"m alone.
This is my prayer:
Please let me go,
I wanna come back home.
Oasis ahead —
I will survive.
At last desert
Gives me a prize
For my suffering
And difficult way
This is a place
Where I will stay.
Step by step
Without result.
Nothing ahead,
Nothing around.
Only desert,
Sand and wind.
I"m alone,
Mirage disappeared.
Sun, I surrender, don"t hurt me.
Don"t you see — I"m alone.
This is my prayer:
Oh, let me go,
I just wanna come back home.
Sun in the Sky,
Sweat in my eyes,
Sand on my feet,
Sand in the blood...
Sun In The Sky
© Copyright: Сергей Осипов, 2001
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Неплохо.
Но в некоторых местах я бы чуть улучшила английский и ритм.
I left my home
A long time ago.
Went on my way
But now I"m alone.
The caravan"s dead,
But I"m still alive.
not a footprint around
nor any signs.
Just lonesome desert
And sun in the sky.
Oasis ahead —
I will survive.
The desrt at last
Gives me respite
A place for my suffering
And difficult way
This is a place
Where I will stay.
Step by step trodding
удачи!
Athena 04.02.2001 • Заявить о нарушении
Но в некоторых местах я бы чуть улучшила английский и ритм.
I left my home
A long time ago.
Went on my way
But now I"m alone.
The caravan"s dead,
But I"m still alive.
not a footprint around
nor any signs.
Just lonesome desert
And sun in the sky.
Oasis ahead —
I will survive.
The desrt at last
Gives me respite
A place for my suffering
And difficult way
This is a place
Where I will stay.
Step by step trodding
удачи!
Athena 04.02.2001 • Заявить о нарушении
Спасибо. Английский я бы и сам с удовольствием улучшил. А вот с ритмом сложнее. Дело в том, что это - не стих, а текст песни.
Огромное спасибо за пожелания и предложения.
Сергей Осипов 06.02.2001 10:58 Заявить о нарушении
Огромное спасибо за пожелания и предложения.
Сергей Осипов 06.02.2001 10:58 Заявить о нарушении