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Рецензия на «The Path to Beauty» (Мге)
The Path to Beauty I have seen;
it started, when I looked within..
Some said there is a special map:
turn left, then right, then there's a gap...
Follow the gap and get across,
don't be afraid if you get lost..
Directions given to and fro,
from those who've seen and those, who know...
I tried to "follow to a tee",
but took a turn to touch a tree..
It caught my eye on this wild Path,
but what a feeling aftermath...
Got back on "track" or so I thought,
but in the moment I was caught..
The ray of sun caressed a leaf,
I stood there in a disbelief...
I witnessed how the nature smiled,
was lost again, just like a child..
And yet proceeded right along,
to cheerful singing of birds' song...
I tried to find what was described,
by others, who have specified..
What I'd encounter on the way,
but it was different, day-by-day...
And that is when I realized,
the Path is not, at all, disguised..
And that there may be more than one:
lit either by the moon or sun...
The stars may also get involved,
and leave the mystery unsolved..
As other factors play a role,
when put together -form a whole...
Like understanding of a mind,
that sought so hard this Path to find..
....Path.......to......................
Beauty....for..........[stakeholder]-..
...............is......................
in [the eye of the beholder]!¯\_(ツ)_/¯
Симона Пекер 19.08.2017 19:16 • Заявить о нарушении
The Path to Beauty I have seen;
it started, when I looked within..
Some said there is a special map:
turn left, then right, then there's a gap...
Follow the gap and get across,
don't be afraid if you get lost..
Directions given to and fro,
from those who've seen and those, who know...
I tried to "follow to a tee",
but took a turn to touch a tree..
It caught my eye on this wild Path,
but what a feeling aftermath...
Got back on "track" or so I thought,
but in the moment I was caught..
The ray of sun caressed a leaf,
I stood there in a disbelief...
I witnessed how the nature smiled,
was lost again, just like a child..
And yet proceeded right along,
to cheerful singing of birds' song...
I tried to find what was described,
by others, who have specified..
What I'd encounter on the way,
but it was different, day-by-day...
And that is when I realized,
the Path is not, at all, disguised..
And that there may be more than one:
lit either by the moon or sun...
The stars may also get involved,
and leave the mystery unsolved..
As other factors play a role,
when put together -form a whole...
Like understanding of a mind,
that sought so hard this Path to find..
....Path.......to......................
Beauty....for..........[stakeholder]-..
...............is......................
in [the eye of the beholder]!¯\_(ツ)_/¯
Симона Пекер 19.08.2017 19:16 • Заявить о нарушении
Path to Beauty led me to see moon kissing the sun... it was for a brief moment, but I saw it.. )
N.Y. 2:45pm Eastern, Monday, August 21, 2017
Симона Пекер 24.08.2017 05:08 Заявить о нарушении
N.Y. 2:45pm Eastern, Monday, August 21, 2017
Симона Пекер 24.08.2017 05:08 Заявить о нарушении
I, too, was working, but we took turns stepping outside. One of my co-workers bought special glasses on Amazon. He gave them to me as a gift, when all was said and done. Yes, we discussed the fact that the last one was observed [umpteen] years ago, hence why it made it special to see it..here and now! )
As far as the radio and what was playing. I heard on the news that it would, but I wasn't listening to it. A friend kept laughing and singing a different song, as I kept putting the glasses on and staring at the sky..."when the moon hits your eye, like a big pizza pie, that's... AMORE.." )))))
Loads of fun that day... and one thing we all agreed on..."we had a moment." Our moment, that we will all remember for a long, long time..
Симона Пекер 28.08.2017 03:00 Заявить о нарушении
As far as the radio and what was playing. I heard on the news that it would, but I wasn't listening to it. A friend kept laughing and singing a different song, as I kept putting the glasses on and staring at the sky..."when the moon hits your eye, like a big pizza pie, that's... AMORE.." )))))
Loads of fun that day... and one thing we all agreed on..."we had a moment." Our moment, that we will all remember for a long, long time..
Симона Пекер 28.08.2017 03:00 Заявить о нарушении
Рецензия на «The Path to Beauty» (Мге)
my eyes are closed
I see her beauty's truth
we are, once more - connected.....
not sure if english is your second language, but the command of it that you have is impressive. beautiful poetry about beauty itself. kudos!
Ди Байжанов 01.10.2011 01:56 • Заявить о нарушении
my eyes are closed
I see her beauty's truth
we are, once more - connected.....
not sure if english is your second language, but the command of it that you have is impressive. beautiful poetry about beauty itself. kudos!
Ди Байжанов 01.10.2011 01:56 • Заявить о нарушении
Рецензия на «The Path to Beauty» (Мге)
Beauty... Everybody finds it in different things...but the real beauty is inside...in our souls...in our good deeds...in our kind hearts... Thank you,it's great!
Ксения Штерн 02.05.2011 20:08 • Заявить о нарушении
Beauty... Everybody finds it in different things...but the real beauty is inside...in our souls...in our good deeds...in our kind hearts... Thank you,it's great!
Ксения Штерн 02.05.2011 20:08 • Заявить о нарушении
I don't believe in gods... Every person has some bad and some good qualities...so-called "gods" and "devils"... Never meant to hurt your feelings and faith...it's just my personal opinion...
Ксения Штерн 04.05.2011 12:07 Заявить о нарушении
Ксения Штерн 04.05.2011 12:07 Заявить о нарушении
Agree with every word! It doesn't matter who the person is and what he believes in...the main thing is that he doesn't bring any harm:-).
Ксения Штерн 05.05.2011 05:33 Заявить о нарушении
Ксения Штерн 05.05.2011 05:33 Заявить о нарушении
Yeah,you are right,but nowadays people forget about it,forget that they have souls...it's awful...
Ксения Штерн 05.05.2011 10:08 Заявить о нарушении
Ксения Штерн 05.05.2011 10:08 Заявить о нарушении
Рецензия на «The Path to Beauty» (Мге)
Beauty that we with so self-forgetful inspiration seek is in us...
Thank you for the pleasure, Mithrandir
Кристина Эмо 13.04.2011 12:33 • Заявить о нарушении
Beauty that we with so self-forgetful inspiration seek is in us...
Thank you for the pleasure, Mithrandir
Кристина Эмо 13.04.2011 12:33 • Заявить о нарушении
Рецензия на «The Path to Beauty» (Мге)
Beautiful verse Mike....When I think of beauty, I can't help but think of Psalms 50. A pleasure to read you. Love Sue
Мэтти Дубоис 04.12.2010 08:19 • Заявить о нарушении
Beautiful verse Mike....When I think of beauty, I can't help but think of Psalms 50. A pleasure to read you. Love Sue
Мэтти Дубоис 04.12.2010 08:19 • Заявить о нарушении
Ah, I love you Mike! You caught me dead to right. When I was having to do critical review, I found people often request what they don’t truly want and when they didn’t want critical review, I found the less said the better since I have offended when I didn’t mean to.
Of course then there are those that leave me speechless and I’m not qualified to do more than say something as trite as ‘beautiful’ and this would be the zone your verse falls into.
Now, for your poem I would like to comment that I wanted to write an Alexandrine so badly but it just didn’t work for me. For some reason I cannot make the 12 beats work and read like silk. You accomplished that here, perfectly and your poetic device is brilliant
Мэтти Дубоис 05.12.2010 07:51 Заявить о нарушении
Of course then there are those that leave me speechless and I’m not qualified to do more than say something as trite as ‘beautiful’ and this would be the zone your verse falls into.
Now, for your poem I would like to comment that I wanted to write an Alexandrine so badly but it just didn’t work for me. For some reason I cannot make the 12 beats work and read like silk. You accomplished that here, perfectly and your poetic device is brilliant
Мэтти Дубоис 05.12.2010 07:51 Заявить о нарушении
Michael, I hope you don't mind but I would like to use this poem to show how this meter is suppose to sound. Of course with your name attached to it. One of the girls at the site is trying to write in this meter and I thought reading your poem might help her and I know it will inspire her. Love Sue
Мэтти Дубоис 29.03.2011 07:41 Заявить о нарушении
Мэтти Дубоис 29.03.2011 07:41 Заявить о нарушении
Рецензия на «The Path to Beauty» (Мге)
A M A Z I N G !!!
I'm humbled...
Беляева Дина 04.10.2010 02:42 • Заявить о нарушении
A M A Z I N G !!!
I'm humbled...
Беляева Дина 04.10.2010 02:42 • Заявить о нарушении
Your blessed encounter shines through your words - the form and function of true Beauty.
Беляева Дина 05.10.2010 00:09 Заявить о нарушении
Беляева Дина 05.10.2010 00:09 Заявить о нарушении
Well, bask in its glory while you can, but go not forget that like everything else the Stars cannot shine forever. Your mission is to carry the spark and light another Star.
Беляева Дина 07.10.2010 06:07 Заявить о нарушении
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Рецензия на «The Path to Beauty» (Мге)
so beautiful, catchy and charming...
really well-written;)
Юлия Скрипко 25.08.2010 10:16 • Заявить о нарушении
so beautiful, catchy and charming...
really well-written;)
Юлия Скрипко 25.08.2010 10:16 • Заявить о нарушении
Рецензия на «The Path to Beauty» (Мге)
ласкает пламя ночи тишину,
а в сердце - ни движения, ни света,
я жду Её - и лишь Её одну:
но я, как все - оставлен без ответа...
так мрамор потеряет белизну,
а бронза распадется, как комета,
не тронет время лишь Её одну,
ни глаз Её, ни этого сонета...
Её лицо - моя звезда в ночи,
очарованье путника-скитальца,
к Её душе не подобрать ключи,
не вышить сердца крестиком на пяльцах,
моей любви не страшны палачи,
ведь чувства не считаются на пальцах,
слова и речи будут горячи,
и ночь огня не потеряет глянца...
Наташа Маршева 02.07.2010 08:13 • Заявить о нарушении
ласкает пламя ночи тишину,
а в сердце - ни движения, ни света,
я жду Её - и лишь Её одну:
но я, как все - оставлен без ответа...
так мрамор потеряет белизну,
а бронза распадется, как комета,
не тронет время лишь Её одну,
ни глаз Её, ни этого сонета...
Её лицо - моя звезда в ночи,
очарованье путника-скитальца,
к Её душе не подобрать ключи,
не вышить сердца крестиком на пяльцах,
моей любви не страшны палачи,
ведь чувства не считаются на пальцах,
слова и речи будут горячи,
и ночь огня не потеряет глянца...
Наташа Маршева 02.07.2010 08:13 • Заявить о нарушении
Рецензия на «The Path to Beauty» (Мге)
that beauty’s deep inside
who’s looking – shall be blessed
your soul is made of light
it can’t be bought but passed...
Юрий Лазирко 23.06.2010 17:34 • Заявить о нарушении
that beauty’s deep inside
who’s looking – shall be blessed
your soul is made of light
it can’t be bought but passed...
Юрий Лазирко 23.06.2010 17:34 • Заявить о нарушении