For the handsome boy
Your hazel,shining eyes, to look and to forget
How hard it is - to feel the coldest ice,
The ice of loneliness, nightmares and regret.
And only touch the petals of your lips,
And feel the tender music of your heart.
Thoughts in my mind are laying now in heaps,
I cannot live and breath when we're apart.
And look again, just see your sweetest smile,
And hear your voice, so charming and so great...
I cannot live. It's not a proper style
Of life... It made me suffer. Really made.
You can't imagine. I can be for you
The only love. The biggest love for ever.
It's not a tear. No, it's only dew.
I will forget it when we are together.
My lovely boy, my mystic, charming boy!
Just for your love I'll give you all I can!
Don't kill me now. Don't hurt me. Don't destroy.
And I will love you only. Now and then...
And now, you see, there's no a proper name
For feeling which is there in my soul.
Just shadows, darkness, dreams and burning flame.
Yes, honey, yes. I love you. That is all.
Свидетельство о публикации №109052304417
http://stihi.ru/2006/09/14-1907
Да, в Вашем стихотворении я бы заменил "together" на "side-by-side"...Правда, пришлось бы заменить при этом и вторую строфу данного четверостишия, чтобы сохранить рифму.
Больше не буду вдаваться в "технические" детали, - главное, что написано от души! Удачи Вам!
Алекс Грек 21.11.2009 13:05 Заявить о нарушении
по поводу изменения слов... идея отличная, нужно будет придумать!
Большое спасибо за Ваш отзыв)
Мальцева Ксения 23.11.2009 17:10 Заявить о нарушении