I'll fit in you my topaz poem
And will let it shine in the dark.
Yo will carry ecstatic glow
In your memory, in your mind.
If they suddenly have epiphany
And would notice this light -
You may answer that you have eaten
What a poet mixed in blood.
And that's why I am walking drunken,
But it's not from the earthly wine,
But it is from topaz amalgam
Which I drunk down the hatch.
It is God to whom I am married,
I would never forget him, no!
But as under eternal marriage -
With Him inside I go and go.
Кому: Лиза
06 мар, 13:13My Topaz Poem
Both readers of this one call it "a great poem" but say nothing about its greatness. What!?
I don't doubt their sincerity, I doubt their literary criticism. We're not at Poemhunter just to deliver and receive compliments, however wonderful they are: we are here to communicate our impressions of each other's poems and receive theirs. It's a literary exchange. There are truly ineffable experiences, which transcend ordinary communication, but our lyric poems are made of words which do communicate. // I am not going to assign the heavy word "great" to your poem.
Your poem is persuasive, intense, allusive, and it speaks to me. And now I will complete the circle of communication by explaining what I mean. //
Your poem is analogous to a SUFI poem in its use of coded language, and, most importantly, in mingling human and divine love. Specifically, you deny drinking ordinary wine, because you are nourished by a heavenly wine of the spirit, which is truly divine grace. The body has its needs which must be satisfied or transcended. And in the spiritual world of the poem, you have the TOPAZ AMALGAM instead which causes spiritual intoxication, and the body is silenced as the focus shifts from the physical world to the divine-human encounter. The ingredients of this TOPAZ AMALGAM include topaz itself, which is the element of divine light or understanding.There is also blood, which, I'm assuming, echoes the Eucharist. And finally there is complete certitude: no doubts interfere, and this element includes the Truth of Faith, embodied in Revelation. The final result of this Topaz Amalgam an be expressed in two ways: One way is to refer to this new state
of being as a marriage, that is, the blessed and purified human soul is united to Jesus as if they were married. This places special emphasis on the theme of divine-human love in which God and an individual human being are perceived as lovers in a marriage of true minds. This is obviously metaphorical but it characterizes much mysticism in Christianity, for example, St. John of the Cross, the 16th century Spanish mystic, whose poetry is remarkably erotic in its use of coded
language. Your poem does not use such exaggerated language. You convey the unique intimacy of God and human in a closing image I find very satisfying in its understated eloquence: "With Him inside I go and go." Your image is not as startling as other mystic poems indulge in, but it conveys clearly and persuasively that end result of the mystic life is UNION WITH GOD while you are still a mortal being, living both the sensory life of a creature of the Earth and the spiritual life of one of the saints. // On such a basis, we can truly call the contents of your poem - "great."